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Nea commentary.
- What representation did you intend to create?
- What purpose does the language level that you have employed serve?
- Ensure that you make a comments on the way the audience, writer and subjected are positioned along the way.
- When you are analysing your work, it is important to consider a range of language levels. Avoid just focusing on the ones you feel most confident with using. A good spread of language levels that are appropriate and meaningful to justifying your ideas is better than repeating the same ones constantly.
- You need to contextualise your own piece of work. Ensure that you comment on the purpose, form, topic, audience and how the subject is being represented. Do not generalise here. You need to be very specific. Generalisations will not help you reach high marks.
- You also need to introduce your style model. Why have you selected it? How does it relate to your own original writing piece?
"My style model is in the genre of a dramatic monologue. There are different sections in the text with scene changes indicated by 'Go to Black' or 'Fade.' The monologue explores a character who is not fully self-aware and I have reflected this in my Original Writing piece... My monologue is similar to Bennett's in many ways, whilst also having differences..."
- Remember that you need to integrate linguistic description where possible, e.g. The pre-modifying attributive adjective ‘gold’ used within the noun phrase ‘the gold star’ is used to represent it as ….
- Once you have commented on your own piece of work, you then need to make sure that you make connections to the style model. It might also be the case that there are marked differences in how you have used the language levels. This is equally acceptable but you need to explain why, as this will enable you to discuss contextual factors shaping the production.
- Remember that you need to engage in meanings. Think about the way the linguistic strategies and language levels used create a representation.
- Adopt an interwoven comparison throughout rather than writing about the style model and your own production piece in isolation.
- Referring to the assessment criteria, you will note that it asks you to ‘guide’ the reader through. You will need to develop a coherent line of thought here. In order to guarantee this, you need to avoid leading with A01 features and instead developing topic sentences that enable the reader to understand the connections and points of comparisons being made.
- Both the style model and original writing piece employ … but to create different representations…
- Within the style model, it utilises … which has been imitated in my original writing piece to …
- Throughout the style model there is use of …. This is mirrored in my original writing piece … so that the subject of … is represented …
- Whilst the style model utilises …. To represent the subject as … I have employed them in a different way so that the topic can be represented as …
- Ensure that you refer closely to your style model by quoting specific examples from it. Likewise, you will need to do the same with your own original writing piece. If you provide no evidence, credit for A01 features cannot be given regardless of how vast a range of features you have employed.
"As monologues are spoken, it is important to represent speech. Bennett employs ellipsis to make it sound spontaneous and realistic. For example, Marjory says 'Said it was Rawdon anyway." This has been imitated in my own original writing piece through..."
- Overall, my original writing piece employs a range of language levels that are similar to my style model to represent the subject as …
- Emulate / Mirror / Employ / Reflected / Imitated / Utilised / Mimics / Aligns /
- Represents / Portrays / Illustrates / Illuminates / Conveys
- The audience are positioned / This positions the audience to …
- Both / Equally / Similarly / In the same way / Using the style model, I have …
- Whereas / In contrast / Unlike / Alternatively / On the other hand
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A* NEA Example Original Writing & Commentary A Level English Language AQA
Subject: English
Age range: 16+
Resource type: Assessment and revision
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I achieved an A* in English and gained 420+/500 marks in the 2022 exam. This is great example of an A* piece to help you craft your NEA and increase your chance of achieving that top grade !
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AQA Education (AQA) is a registered charity (number 1073334) and a company limited by guarantee registered in England and Wales (number 3644723). Our registered address is AQA, Devas Street, Manchester M 15 6EX. NEA Student response with commentary A-level English Language and Literature Making Connections: non-exam assessment
Example coursework for both tasks in A Level English Language. Includes two full pieces of coursework & the data used to produce them. This language investigation & directed writing with commentary was submitted to AQA in summer 2017 and awarded an A*. This makes it the perfect example to show students what is required of them in the NEA.
Similarly in data set 1 Joey uses the word "saucy pan" this is an example of affixation as he added a "y" onto the word "sauce". This shows that Joey is actively using language rather than simply copying the adult. This could lessen the importance of caregiver language used as a model of speech for children to imitate.
1 of 7. NEA: Independent critical study Texts across time. This resource gives an exemplar student response to a non-exam assessment task, with an accompanying moderator commentary illustrating why the response has been placed within a particular band of the assessment criteria. This resource should be used in conjunction with the accompanying ...
Example student response A - Band 5. Using Tennyson's 'Ulysses', write a monologue by Ulysses' wife in which she reflects on the words he speaks. Use ideas from the critical anthology to inform your work and include a commentary explaining how you have explored ideas from Feminist Theory and Narrative Theory.
formulaic: for example, the second paragraph goes through the 'senses' gears of taste, smell and touch a little too mechanically. When Student B stops to add little stories to colour the description, they rely too much on simple assertions such as 'it was a painting' or 'the location was nice'. Student C commentary
In order to write a successful commentary, analyse the language levels used in your style model. Highlight them in different colours, e.g. red = syntax, green = word classes. This is a really important starting point as you need to make connections (A04) to your style model. Your commentary cannot just write about your own Original Writing ...
The non-exam assessment (NEA) for the A-level specification only is 'Language in Action', and consists of an investigation, original writing and a commentary. Visit aqa.org.uk/7702 for detailed information about all aspects of NEA administration. The head of the school or college is responsible for making sure that NEA is conducted in line with ...
AO5. There is thorough and confident engagement with the debate set up in the task and the student clearly agrees with the proposition, offering some challenge in the response to Emma. The candidate is thinking well about the task. This response seems consistent with the band 4 descriptors. This resource is part of the Aspects of comedy ...
AO5. The candidate engages thoroughly with the debate set up in the question in the focus on the suffering of male characters in these texts and in the discussion of different forms of suffering. Overall: Coherent and thorough: this response seems to fit the Band 4 descriptors. This resource is part of the Love through the ages resource package.
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Our AS and A-level exams in English include questions that allow students to demonstrate their ability to: draw together their knowledge, skills and understanding from across the full course of study. provide extended responses. All AS and A-level components offer only extended response questions. All materials are available in English only.
Age range: 16+. Resource type: Lesson (complete) File previews. pptx, 1.68 MB. docx, 7.25 KB. docx, 7.81 KB. docx, 8.02 KB. docx, 317.95 KB. Scheme covering how to write a commentary with full range of examples and a supportive planning sheet.
This makes it the perfect example to show students what is required of them in the NEA. Aqa language paper 2, question 5 model answer this is a model answer for question 5 of language paper 2 about the dangers of sugar. English language paper 2 question 5 march 6, 2021; Aqa english language paper 2 question 5 examples.
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A* NEA Example Original Writing & Commentary A Level English Language AQA. Subject: English. Age range: 16+. Resource type: Assessment and revision. File previews. pdf, 134.19 KB. pdf, 130.13 KB. I achieved an A* in English and gained 420+/500 marks in the 2022 exam. This is great example of an A* piece to help you craft your NEA and increase ...
The title should aim to highlight specific areas of language usage. For example: • 'An investigation into power strategies used by politicians during an election campaign'. • 'An examination of a child's writing aged 6, 7 and 8 years old'. • 'An exploration of male and female language use within social media communication'.
Studying from past student work is an amazing way to learn and research, however you must always act with academic integrity. This document is the prior work of another student. Thinkswap has partnered with Turnitin to ensure students cannot copy directly from our resources. Understand how to responsibly use this work by visiting 'Using ...